First I would like to thank youfor encouraging me and helping me with my paper.
My next assignment is to write a persuasive essay. I have never written one before and I'm lost. Could you please help me?
It has to be 5 paragraphs and organized like
a. First main point
1. Supporting evidence and explanation (one of the details must be related to my own experience or those of close family members and friends
2. Supporting evidence and explanation
3. Opposing claim to this point
4. Supporting evidence refuting that opposing claim and explanation
This is the question:
Most businesses now say that no one can smoke cigarettes in any of their offices. Many local governments have banned smoking in all public places.
My position is I agree with the banes.
This is what I have written so far; please do not worry about grammar or mechanics. I am trying to see if I am going in the right direction.
I know you probably thought that I was not coming back, but I had a very busy week.
Here is my persuasive essay. Is it persuasive? Is there a point that does not make sense or is not persuasive? How does it flow?
I'm still working on the opening line, trying to get the reader engaged.
I'm still a little unsure how to introduce my topics and then restate them in the end.
Thank you so much for reading my essay again.
Watching people smoking disgusts me. It seems as though every time I go to the grocery store, gas station or a restaurant there is either a customer or an employee smoking outside the door. That is why I strongly support the local governments ban on no smoking in public places. Moreover, most private business are banning smoking in their office buildings, however, some business' still allow smoking inside their buildings, which is where some problems can begin. Also some people will do anything to avoid second hand smoke because they know the affects that it can have on their health. Never again would I like to see people smoking in public.
Second hand smoke is very harmful to non-smokers. As a non-smoker I am very aware of people smoking around me. I know that every time I am breathing in second hand smoke, it is damaging my lungs. However, infrequent exposure to smoke will not lead to death but I have noticed an increase in people smoking and I am concerned about the amount of smoke I am exposed to. Second hand smoke affects everyone differently and our family experienced it while bowling. The bowling alley we went to had a section for smokers and a section for non-smokers. As every member of my family is a non-smoker, we used the bowling lanes in the no smoking area. The problem being, there was no separation between the smoking section and the no smoking section. Therefore the smoke drifted into our area, and began affecting my brother. It caused him to get a severe headache, which ruined our family night. This is why I support the ban against smoking. I feel that we should be able to have an enjoyable family night without worrying about people smoking. However, people that smoke argue that this is a free country and they should have a right to smoke anywhere they please. I strongly believe that as a free country we all should have the right to do anything we like, as long as it will not damage or affect someone else's life.
Smoking is a bad habit that young people model. The more young people are exposed to smoking the better the chance of them becoming smokers themselves, which is why young people should be discouraged from smoking. If they begin smoking when they are young, it could lead them to other addictive and harmful drugs. This is another reason I feel the need to ban smoking in all public places. My friend Tim was only sixteen when he began smoking. Why did he begin smoking? It was not as if he awoke one morning and decided that that was the day he would began smoking, but it was the constant exposure of seeing people smoking. Tim worked at AUTOBELL, and as customers waited for their vehicles to be washed and dried, they would have a smoke. After seeing people smoking he decided to try smoking a cigarette. A few days later he was smoking about a half pack a day, but then he got addicted and was smoking a pack or more a day. The worst part was when he was trying to quit. Even know he no longer worked for AUTOBELL, people were still smoking in front of the stores that he would shop at. Most smokers think that smoking is not influencing younger people. But younger people like to act as if they are grown up, and when they see adults smoke they want to emulate them. Smoking is a very bad habit to form and with a ban on smoking in public places, young people will not be exposed as often.
There have been entire office buildings that have burned to the ground because people were smoking inside. It is very encouraging to hear that more companies have banned smoking and I hope that more will follow. Without cigarette smoke inside the buildings, they are more inviting for non-smokers and safer for everyone. My dad used to own an awning company called "Awnings Only". One of his employers sewed the canvas for the awnings. When she first began working for my dad she was allowed to smoke as she worked but after a few, very minor accidents she was asked to stop smoking. Even though she only burned a few small holes in the canvas tops, my dad realized there could have been far greater damage done. Without smoking she was more concentrated on her work and made a better product. My dad later decided to put up signs that read 'Do Not Smoke" so if he hired another employee and forgot to tell them that smoking was not aloud, at least they could read the signs. She said that at her previous employment she was allowed to smoke anywhere in the building and even while she sewed the canvas. My dad made it clear to her that it was costing him money because of her carelessness. After my dad made a no smoking rule and put signs up he did not have any more problems with smoking in the building.
I am against all smoking in public places. Second hand smoke is the worst, and we, as non-smokers should not have to suffer any more. Smokers should finally pay the consequence by not being allowed to smoke in public at all. Every office owner should have to ban smoking inside his or her offices once and for all.
I'm glad you're back! You are very welcome for the help, I'm glad it makes a difference!
Persuasive essays (I think) are a lot of fun because you really get a chance to shine as a writer, more so than in analytical essays where the stuffiness of academics can get in the way of your writing style.
Let's see what we've got here!
This is a good rough draft! I can easily pick out your main topic (that you support smoking bans), your first supporting detail (that second hand smoke is dangerous to non-smokers-you support this with your personal story about your brother, fulfilling the personalization requirement) your second supporting detail, that smoking is a bad behavior that young children model, perhaps leading them to other drug abuse, and your third supporting detail (the damage your dad's employee caused to his product, again relating to your life fulfilling the personalization requirement).
I absolutely think you're on the right track! I can't wait for you to post the rest!
Ban the Smoking: It’s Bad for Everyone
Now that America is no longer dependent on tobacco production as a means to sustain its economy, the industry and culture surrounding it should be heavily controlled. Now that fewer people are smoking cigarettes, because of the well-documented health concerns related to its use, more cities and districts are cracking down on smoking in public places – and rightfully so. Smoking in public places should not only be banned, it should come with heavy penalties, such as outlandish fines, criminal charges and, if possible, public beatings. Due to the health problems associated with smoking cigarettes, due to smoking being a fire hazard and offensive to non-smokers, smoking in public places should never go under the radar. It should be banned on a national scale.
Smoking cigarettes, cigars or pipes in public places should be banned because it’s offensive to the non-smokers who have to endure the smoke, the butts, the mess and the smell. Consider the typical public place – a market door entrance, a park bench, an elevator. People come to these places for peace and quiet, for necessity, to get to work, so they should not be required to breathe another person’s poisonous tobacco fumes. Everyone knows that second-hand smoke is just as, if not more, dangerous than directly inhaling the smoke. Why should a health-conscious, everyday person have to be penalized for another’s bad decision? It just isn’t right – so smoking in public places should be banned altogether. It’s also disgusting to smell cigarette smoke – even worse when it’s on your clothes. The American government has yet to criminalize the use of all tobacco products, mostly because of billion-dollar companies like Phillip Morris, out of Richmond, Virginia, pays millions of dollars in taxes annually. But cigarettes are killing everyday Americans, costing them too much in the long run. They should certainly be banned everywhere, not just in public places.
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Smoking Is Not Fashionable Anymore!
Let’s ban smoking in public places because it gives young, impressionable adolescents the wrong idea. They see it and think it’s a normal, healthy, cool adult thing to do – something they perhaps feel they’re supposed to do it as adults, maybe even as teens. This is bad because they do not possess the foresight and self-preservation experience to avoid doing things that could one day kill them. By banning smoking in public places, fewer people will be seen smoking and, subsequently, outcast from society. It will be the thing that those people do; they will have to hide it. This is good because this mentality will condition smokers to perhaps give up smoking, a good deterrent for sure because the same social and peer pressure that may have encouraged them to begin smoking has gone the other way. Banning smoking in public places is a wonderful idea and should be taken up by every single jurisdiction, municipality, city, hole-in-the-wall town and county in the country.
In addition to smoking raising health concerns, banning public smoking altogether, including indoors, would surely cut down on fires – both in buildings and possibly in nature, as well. Just picture a waiter with five minutes for a smoke standing just outside a restaurant’s kitchen in a rush to fill their nicotine cravings. The headwaiter calls their name and they flick the cancer stick away – it’s not their problem, right? But it’s windy that night and the cigarette rolls into the nearby trash. And, bam – a fire has begun. People could die. How about banning smoking anywhere a fire could start, any place that could endanger others? This would cut down immensely on building fires. Innocent people wouldn’t have to die in fires, and their beloved possessions would not be destroyed. Banning public smoking benefits everyone, including the smoker.
Let’s conclude this argument by going a step further. If we can already see how banning public smoking would benefit our citizens – protecting their health, peace of mind, homes and possessions – why stop there? Let’s ban smoking tobacco products altogether! Let’s rid our wonderful society of this evil poison, this killer of people, this addictive substance with no health value whatsoever. Let’s make cigarettes so expensive to buy that few can afford them, and so hard to find that they may as well be sold on the black market. This should apply to those vaporized smoking apparatuses, too. They are said to be a healthier alternative to smoking filter tobacco products, but they are just offensive to be around.